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Each letter I write here now is
a bitter tear from my very eye.
My sorrows are invading,
what choice do I have?
I must comply.
A thought has found it's way
into the dark halls of my mind.
A though so wrong and rotten,
so unjust, broken...
But my mind allows it, as if blind.
The thought is very simple.
One may say it even kind...
But I hate it and regret
that I have ever even
dared to mention it...
But I comply.
I will cleanse myself of karma,
so I could forever die.
I will honor every aspect
in my natal horoscope.
I will try and follow orders
from the mouths of mediocre.
I will work with my skills,
until they shine and win the prize.
I'll go back to the academy
and watch my own art die.
I will not bite those who hurt me,
just turn and walk away.
I will not spend all the money
in my pocket the same day.
I'll be all pretty and nice,
with no sin or a vice,
without a flaw.
I'll do all I must and can,
no matter the pain I endure...
Just to die without a debt,
and never incarnate again.
a bitter tear from my very eye.
My sorrows are invading,
what choice do I have?
I must comply.
A thought has found it's way
into the dark halls of my mind.
A though so wrong and rotten,
so unjust, broken...
But my mind allows it, as if blind.
The thought is very simple.
One may say it even kind...
But I hate it and regret
that I have ever even
dared to mention it...
But I comply.
I will cleanse myself of karma,
so I could forever die.
I will honor every aspect
in my natal horoscope.
I will try and follow orders
from the mouths of mediocre.
I will work with my skills,
until they shine and win the prize.
I'll go back to the academy
and watch my own art die.
I will not bite those who hurt me,
just turn and walk away.
I will not spend all the money
in my pocket the same day.
I'll be all pretty and nice,
with no sin or a vice,
without a flaw.
I'll do all I must and can,
no matter the pain I endure...
Just to die without a debt,
and never incarnate again.
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Strangely, my first take on the fixed form.
This is the second piece of the duo. The two poems, "Life" and "Death", are my best attempts to describe my sentiments towards existence from a deeply personal view. Though many will disagree with me, it is what it is.
I probably made it unclear in the poem, but enduring until death is not my vision of life. You may even interpret this like wanting to buy a ticket to heaven or whatever, but that's really not the point.
Needless to say that you won't enjoy this poem. I haven't enjoyed writing it. And that's just the way it should be. This is a part of my truth. It took courage for me to read this grotesque piece and see how ugly this personal truth really is.
This is the second piece of the duo. The two poems, "Life" and "Death", are my best attempts to describe my sentiments towards existence from a deeply personal view. Though many will disagree with me, it is what it is.
I probably made it unclear in the poem, but enduring until death is not my vision of life. You may even interpret this like wanting to buy a ticket to heaven or whatever, but that's really not the point.
Needless to say that you won't enjoy this poem. I haven't enjoyed writing it. And that's just the way it should be. This is a part of my truth. It took courage for me to read this grotesque piece and see how ugly this personal truth really is.
© 2014 - 2024 VarahilKirin
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Of the two, I actually prefer this poem over "Life", because I think by contemplating death, you're commenting on life at the same time. Life and death are one of those solid binaries, and you really play on that well here. What is a comment on death is actually a comment on life.
What I like about this poem is it's simplicity - you don't need to follow a set rhythm here, as it would actually diminish the power of the emotion behind his. In short, traditional poetic forms here would just miss the point - it seems obscene to talk about death in rhyme. That being said, I like how there is some sort of echo of a rhyme behind this, and it always comes when you're finishing a stanza. It highlights the point, and makes the words stand out.
If I were to pick out a single image that I thought was the best one in this piece, it would be:
"I will cleanse myself of karma,
so I could forever die."
The reasons I think that is the best image is because you're evoking ideas of reincarnation, (as karma features in Buddhism) that always fit nicely when thinking about cycles of life and death. In quite a few poems, the cycle of natural renewal is one that is used as an image of hope, and by turning your back on it here it shows that idea to be insufficient. All in all, very good work!
What I like about this poem is it's simplicity - you don't need to follow a set rhythm here, as it would actually diminish the power of the emotion behind his. In short, traditional poetic forms here would just miss the point - it seems obscene to talk about death in rhyme. That being said, I like how there is some sort of echo of a rhyme behind this, and it always comes when you're finishing a stanza. It highlights the point, and makes the words stand out.
If I were to pick out a single image that I thought was the best one in this piece, it would be:
"I will cleanse myself of karma,
so I could forever die."
The reasons I think that is the best image is because you're evoking ideas of reincarnation, (as karma features in Buddhism) that always fit nicely when thinking about cycles of life and death. In quite a few poems, the cycle of natural renewal is one that is used as an image of hope, and by turning your back on it here it shows that idea to be insufficient. All in all, very good work!